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Co-authored-by: Mark "Murch" Erhardt <murch@murch.one>

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@@ -23,9 +23,9 @@ This BIP is licensed under the BSD 2-clause license.
 
 === Motivation ===
 
-Using a new address for each Bitcoin transaction is a crucial aspect of maintaining privacy. This often requires a secure interaction between sender and receiver so that the receiver can hand out a fresh address, a batch of fresh addresses, or a method for the sender to generate addresses on-demand, such as an xpub.
+Using a new address for each Bitcoin transaction is a crucial aspect of maintaining privacy. This often requires a secure interaction between sender and receiver, so that the receiver can hand out a fresh address, a batch of fresh addresses, or a method for the sender to generate addresses on-demand, such as an xpub.
 
-However, interaction is often infeasible and in many cases undesirable. To solve for this, various protocols have been proposed which use a static payment address and notifications sent via the blockchain<ref name="out_of_band_notifications">'''Why not use out-of-band notifications''' Out of band notifications (e.g. using something other than the Bitcoin blockchain) have been proposed as a way of addressing the privacy and cost concerns of using the Bitcoin blockchain as a messaging layer. This, however, simply moves the privacy and cost concerns somewhere else and increases the risk of losing money due to a notification not being reliably delivered, or even censored, and makes this notification data critical for backup to recover funds.</ref>. These protocols eliminate the need for interaction, but at the expense of increased costs for one-time payments and a noticeable footprint in the blockchain, potentially revealing metadata about the sender and receiver. Notification schemes also allow the receiver to link all payments from the same sender, compromising sender privacy.
+However, interaction is often infeasible and in many cases undesirable. To solve for this, various protocols have been proposed which use a static payment address and notifications sent via the blockchain<ref name="out_of_band_notifications">'''Why not use out-of-band notifications''' Out-of-band notifications (e.g. using something other than the Bitcoin blockchain) have been proposed as a way of addressing the privacy and cost concerns of using the Bitcoin blockchain as a messaging layer. This, however, simply moves the privacy and cost concerns somewhere else and increases the risk of losing money due to a notification not being reliably delivered, or even censored, and makes this notification data critical for backup to recover funds.</ref>. These protocols eliminate the need for interaction, but at the expense of increased costs for one-time payments and a noticeable footprint in the blockchain, potentially revealing metadata about the sender and receiver. Notification schemes also allow the receiver to link all payments from the same sender, compromising sender privacy.
 
 This proposal aims to address the limitations of these current approaches by presenting a solution that eliminates the need for interaction, eliminates the need for notifications, and protects both sender and receiver privacy. These benefits come at the cost of requiring wallets to scan the blockchain in order to detect payments. This added requirement is generally feasible for full nodes but poses a challenge for light clients. While it is possible today to implement a privacy-preserving light client at the cost of increased bandwidth, light client support is considered an area of open research (see [[#appendix-a-light-client-support|Appendix A: Light Client Support]]).
 
@@ -140,7 +140,7 @@ For everything not defined above, we use the notation from [https://github.com/b
 
 === Versions ===
 
-This document defines version 0 (''sp1q''). Version is communicated through the address in the same way as Segwit addresses. Future upgrades to silent payments will require a new version. As much as possible, future upgrades should support receiving from older wallets (e.g. a silent payments v0 wallet can send to both v0 and v1 addresses). Any changes that break compatibility with older silent payment versions should be a new BIP.
+This document defines version 0 (''sp1q''). Version is communicated through the address in the same way as bech32 addresses (see [[https://github.com/bitcoin/bips/blob/master/bip-0173.mediawiki#bech32 BIP173]]. Future upgrades to silent payments will require a new version. As much as possible, future upgrades should support receiving from older wallets (e.g. a silent payments v0 wallet can send to both v0 and v1 addresses). Any changes that break compatibility with older silent payment versions should be a new BIP.
 
 Future silent payments versions will use the following scheme:
 
@@ -200,7 +200,7 @@ A silent payment address is constructed in the following manner:
 ** The human-readable part "sp" for mainnet, "tsp" for testnets (e.g.  signet, testnet)
 ** The data-part values:
 *** The character "q", to represent a silent payment address of version 0
-*** The 66 byte concatenation of the receiver's public keys, ''ser<sub>P</sub>(B<sub>scan</sub>) || ser<sub>P</sub>(B<sub>m</sub>)''
+*** The 66-byte concatenation of the receiver's public keys, ''ser<sub>P</sub>(B<sub>scan</sub>) || ser<sub>P</sub>(B<sub>m</sub>)''
 
 Note: [https://github.com/bitcoin/bips/blob/master/bip-0173.mediawiki BIP173] imposes a 90 character limit for Bech32 segwit addresses and limits versions to 0 through 16, whereas a silent payment address requires ''at least'' 117 characters<ref name="why_117_chars"> ''' Why do silent payment addresses need at least 117 characters?''' A silent payment address is a bech32m encoding comprised of the following parts:
 
@@ -212,7 +212,7 @@ Note: [https://github.com/bitcoin/bips/blob/master/bip-0173.mediawiki BIP173] im
 * checksum [6 characters]
 
 
-For a silent payments v0 address, this results in a 117 character address when using a 3 character HRP. Future versions of silent payment addresses may add to the payload, which is why a 1023 character limit is suggested.</ref> and allows versions up to 31. Additionally, since higher versions may add to the data field, it is recommended implementations use a limit of 1023 characters (see [https://github.com/bitcoin/bips/blob/master/bip-0173.mediawiki#checksum-design BIP173: Checksum design] for more details).
+For a silent payments v0 address, this results in a 117-character address when using a 3-character HRP. Future versions of silent payment addresses may add to the payload, which is why a 1023-character limit is suggested.</ref> and allows versions up to 31. Additionally, since higher versions may add to the data field, it is recommended implementations use a limit of 1023 characters (see [https://github.com/bitcoin/bips/blob/master/bip-0173.mediawiki#checksum-design BIP173: Checksum design] for more details).
 
 === Inputs For Shared Secret Derivation ===