From e34c2da1fcf268d27b96fe2594f76e30183e7bc1 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: Jeff Burdges <burdges@gnunet.org>
Date: Tue, 8 Nov 2016 16:58:03 +0100
Subject: Attempt to shorten the introduction and make comemnts on shortening
 elsewhere

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 doc/paper/taler.tex | 9 ++++++---
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@@ -107,7 +107,7 @@ such as the MasterCard and VisaCard credit card schemes and computerized
 bank transactions such as SWIFT.  These systems enable mass surveillance
 by both governments and private companies.  Aspects of this surveillance
 sometimes benefit society by providing information about tax evasion or
-crimes like extortion.  % TODO : anti-money laundering later?
+crimes like extortion. 
 In particular, bribery and corruption are limited to elites who can
 afford to escape the dragnet.
 %
@@ -118,8 +118,9 @@ activity, and this limits the ability of the state to shape the
 society.  As bribery is virtually impossible to detect, corruption is
 widespread and not limited to social elites.
 %
-Zerocash~\cite{zerocash} is an example for translating an
-anarchistic economy into the digital realm.
+% SHORTER: Zerocash need not be mentioned so early? 
+% Zerocash~\cite{zerocash} is an example for translating an
+% anarchistic economy into the digital realm.
 
 This paper describes Taler, a simple and practical payment system for
 a social-liberal society, which is underserved by
@@ -310,6 +311,8 @@ would be to add partial spending and a form of Taler's refresh protocol.
 At present, we feel these relatively new cryptographic techniques incur
 unacceptable financial risks to the exchange, due to underdeveloped
 implementation practice.
+% SHORTER: Maybe some of the abbove could be thinned since
+% they do not know much about Taler's refresh protcol yet.
 
 In this vein, there are pure also zero-knoledge proof based schemes
 like \cite{ST99}, and subsequently Zerocash~\cite{zerocash}, and maybe
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